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I love that song!

"May it Be," by Enya.

<a href="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_8u4VLk0iTI" target="_blank">http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_8u4VLk0iTI</a>

I'd gotten to the end of "Fellowship of the Ring" soundtrack.

I'm intrigued by your riddle. So far, the only thing I can think of with the "bury" from the words of a Warrior dear is the red pommel stone on Martin's Sword. This would also be supported by "sonnet" minus an n being "sonet," which can be rearranged to "stone." And the stone in Martin's hilt was there before Boar ever got to making a new blade for it. But I haven't got any clue about any of the rest of the poem. At any rate, I love the rhyme scheme inside of it.

I know we've only had brief exposure to him in the story thus far, but I'm already enjoying Lord Redsand's character. Badgers make everything better. In other notes, Rizuel is coming off as fittingly cruel, and I'm already hoping for the freedom of the two slaves on board.

I only spotted one typo, I think. On your second post, when you describe the appearance of the scroll the riddle is written on, you say, "It was coveted in an untidy scrawl." I think you mean "covered."

If I can offer a critical observation (this is, of course, totally up to you as the writer to accept or ignore, and I recognize that it's a bit nitpicky), you've fleshed out three separate characters already with self-denying humility. Lord Redsand asks Hazel not to call him by his formal title, Clove the haremaid declines her award for the winning the wall-race by asking that it be given to the dibbuns, and Abbot Ordlin waves away Skipper's reference to his title, affirms that he's really a recorder at heart, and makes certain that Skipper and Russet understand they haven't disturbed him from any resting whatsoever.

I like that you're adding these touches to these characters, certainly. It's just that, for me, the repetition of this specific trait comes out of the text... almost in the same way that closely repeated words do. Since I've only been introduced to 11 protagonists at that point in the story, it seems somewhat unlikely to me that, for 3 of those 11, one of the very first things I would learn from observing them is that they are all particularly humble.

Again, that's nitpicky. This is good work, and I'm interested to see what's going to happen next.   

I wouldn't say that just because he never loves again means he never recovers, many people either only love once, or never love at all, and it is not always because of a previous tragedy, but because they don't find the right person.

The mouse was in his twenties (relative to human years).  He had plenty of time and plenty of beasts.

And I don't think he broods for the rest of his life, I mean, it still makes him sad and probably angry to think about it, but I think he accepts it and moves along.

He would certainly brood over it whenever he felt love again.

-Duxwing

The tall gray otter stood and ran in front of the pony, pushing it's head to stop it. He then turned and pulled the sparrow off, "This is meeting of peace! We do not want fighting here." he threw the sparrow to the ground disdainfully. "You two behave yourselves!"

I just wanna rideit!  Not fightit!

-Duxwing

I'm gonna be in 8th grade next school year.

The tall gray otter stood and ran in front of the pony, pushing it's head to stop it. He then turned and pulled the sparrow off, "This is meeting of peace! We do not want fighting here." he threw the sparrow to the ground disdainfully. "You two behave yourselves!"

iamtheunquestionablewinnerbecauseitwillbehardtoreadthis

I don't like cookies 'n' cream or oreo ice cream.