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[Gonff the Mousethief]

                                                  Hope you all enjoy!

chapter 1 will be up shortly

[The Skarzs]

Sorry, messed up.

[Gonff the Mousethief]

here we go!

                                            PROULOGE




Ong the mole was walking through Mossflower. The poor old mole was getting very thirsty. He had lived in a small cave all his life, and wanted to go on adventure to live out his days. He then saw River Moss.
''O MOY! WETER!''
He hobbled on his tiny mole legs and bent over for a drink. When he came up, everything went black. He saw two big gates and tall badger guarding them.
''Good one, Xepher.''
''Thank you, Neene.''
Xepher kicked the head of the mole into the river then cleaned his axe.


                         The Marlfoxes, had returned.

[Gonff the Mousethief]

                                                       Chapter 1
                                                       


Tudwell was mad. He had been captured and put in Fort Flyplat Run by Whyle Spitz. It was a small fort with rusty everything. He had once lived with Ong the mole. He ran away about 2 weeks ago. Now he was locked up. Whyle had about a score and a half of rats. They were very small. He had an idea.
''Hey, Rathead, can I tell ya a secret?''
''Watz gonnaz bea zecret?''
''Just come on over here!''
''Alrightz!''
Guggard, the rat, carried a small axe.
''Wat iz youza wont?''
Guggard leaned his ear into the cell.
Tudwell could reach the axe now.
''I wanted to tell you... THIS!''
Tudwell hit Guggard in the leg with the bottom of the axe!
''AYEAYEA!''
Tudwell began hacking at the rusted cell door. It finally came open.
''Bye!''
He picked up Guggard and ran down the hall in to the main room.
''HI EVERYBODY!''
He threw Guggard at the rats that were in shock.
Whyle cam walking in and saw Tudwell hacking away at the 20 rats he had left in the main room.
'' ACKA! ACKA! GET HIMZ NOW!''
The other rats came charing at him. But the all fell in three swings of his axe.
''COME HERE SPITZ!''
He ran after the rat.
''NOO-''
Tudwell had thrown the axe!
He picked up the axe out of the fallen rat.
''Now, that's better.''
He walked out of the fort and into Mossflower.
''Ahh, fresh air.''

[Captain Tammo]

I like the rats' accents! Tudwell is quite the fighter, too. He sounds like a creature that would be a legend in Mossflower: slaying ten rats with just three swings of an ax!

[Brinty]

Good writing, but are the rats the painted ones? Is Tudwell a fox and if he is such a warrior how did he get captured? When will the next chapter be out?

[Gonff the Mousethief]

1 no there are just small rats. 2well he had no weapon 3 hopefully tomorrow

[Brinty]

Thanks for answering my questions. I am really looking forward to the next chapter!

[321tumbler]

This sounds really good. Can't wait for more!

[Gnoflet]

I like it! Whens the next chapter coming out?

[Gonff the Mousethief]

hopefully today!

[Gonff the Mousethief]

                                                     CHAPTER 2




''FUMBLE!! COME HERE NOW!''
Log a Log was mad at him. He had eaten all of the cake again!
''Ye-e-s Log-a-a-Log.''
Gulp
''WHY ARE YOU EATEN THE CAKE FOR OLD BUBGUR AGAIN!''
''Im sorry Log a Log.''
Fumble looked at the ground and shuffled his feet.
''SORRY! SORRY! WHY WHY,GET OUT OF THE CAMP NOW!''
''Yes, sir.''
Fumble walked along the river. He thought to himself.
''Why does he get so mad? I was just hungry! Maybe I should go. This time for good!''
Fumble ran back to camp out of Log a Log's sight. He got his dagger and bow and arrows.
''Where is the boat?''
He looked all over the camp. He could not find it anywhere! As he was walking back, out of the corner of his eye, he saw a black object move. He just thought it was his imagination. He made it back to camp and found his small logboat.
''Here ya are, KeenEye!''
He dragged it into the woods so nobody saw him.
''Whew, I found ya!''
He carried it over his head and onto the bank. He slid it into River Moss.
''Good bye, Log A Log.''
As he paddled away, he did not know what was happening back at camp.

[Brinty]

Awesome chapter!

[Gonff the Mousethief]

Thank you so much for the feedback!!

[The Skarzs]

It's a little fast paced, but good