Redwall Abbey

Fan Works => Fan Fiction => Topic started by: Skalrag of Marshank on August 17, 2011, 08:47:19 PM

Title: Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Skalrag of Marshank on August 17, 2011, 08:47:19 PM
So, I decided to write my first Redwall fanfiction. As I said, it's my first one, so bear with me...

Prologue:

The perfect summer morning was broken abruptly by a dark red figure running through the forest, trampling underbrush as it went.

A house sparrow cocked its head in the direction of the figure, curious about this intruder.

The sparrow spread its wings and fluttered to another tree, keeping the stranger in sight. The sparrow hopped to a lower branch. It was a fox!

The sparrow watched as the fox ventured a backwards glance. That was his mistake. The fox tripped over the roots of an oak tree, and went head over tail.

The sparrow could not suppress a quiet titter before flying back to his nest.

************************************************************

Redtail was running.

He ran blindly through Mossflower Woods, the only thought in his panicked mind was to get away from where he was.

To get away from them.

He had to get away from them. His life depended on it. He had done something terribly wrong, and if they caught him...

He couldn't bear thinking about it.

I have to look back, he thought. Are they right behind me?

Redtail turned his head around, and tripped over the roots.

Now that he had stopped running, the horror of what he had done overwhelmed his fear and panic. Tears flooded from his eyes, and sobs racked his body.

Suddenly, he heard somebeast crashing through the forest after him. The sound grew louder and louder, and he painfully dragged himself under a bush to hide.

How had everything gone so terribly wrong? How could something like this happen?

************************************************************
Title: Re: Into the Sun: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Nightfire on August 18, 2011, 07:52:23 PM
It sounds great!!!  ;D ;D  ;D When can we have more?
Title: Re: Into the Sun: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Skalrag of Marshank on August 19, 2011, 12:44:44 AM
I'll probably write some more tomorrow morning... ;) Glad you like it! Sorry I only posted the Prologue. I had to go to bed right after I wrote it... I don't even know why I called it Into the Sun...I am terrible at thinking up names...
Title: Re: Into the Sun: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Tiria Wildlough on August 19, 2011, 09:23:00 AM
Looking good! ;D
Title: Re: Into the Sun: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Skalrag of Marshank on August 19, 2011, 05:35:27 PM
'Kay, I wrote some more. Enjoy! :)
Title: Re: Into the Sun: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Nightfire on August 19, 2011, 05:55:39 PM
Great, now we're in suspense!  :D
Title: Re: Into the Sun: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Tiria Wildlough on August 20, 2011, 02:43:14 PM
Lovely!
Title: Re: Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Skalrag of Marshank on September 10, 2011, 04:23:29 PM
O.K., so I changed the name to Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall, because it sounded more fitting to the story.

Sorry I haven't written in a while, I got Writers' Block... :(

Anyway, feel free to give me suggestions and/or criticism! Like I said, this is my first Redwall fanfiction, so I'm still learning the ropes here...
Title: Re: Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Nightfire on September 10, 2011, 04:38:21 PM
It sounds really nice, Skalrag. So far, your grammar and spelling is perfect!
Title: Re: Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Skalrag of Marshank on October 03, 2011, 10:57:45 PM
O.K., so I wrote some more. Hope you like it! ;D
Title: Re: Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Rollo the Baby Bankvole on December 10, 2011, 12:05:14 AM
Wow! :o This is really mysterious, it makes me want to read more! :P
Title: Re: Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Skipper on December 21, 2011, 05:09:07 PM
wow...this is awesome i want to see what happens next
Title: Re: Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Ceteruler on December 23, 2011, 09:25:45 PM
where can I find the story? I can't see it.
Title: Re: Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Rollo the Baby Bankvole on December 24, 2011, 01:26:53 AM
Only the Prologue is up at the moment, but you can find it in the first post. :)
Title: Re: Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Skalrag of Marshank on December 26, 2011, 02:12:40 AM
Yeah, sorry. I am experiencing some Writer's Block lately, so you'll have to wait a bit before I write some more. ;)

When I finally write a next chapter (actually first chapter  ::)) I'll post it, don't worry.
Title: Re: Light and Shadow: A Tale of Redwall
Post by: Rollo the Baby Bankvole on December 29, 2011, 11:00:25 AM
That's okay! :D Awesome, can't wait!