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Started by Gonff the Mousethief, April 06, 2016, 10:14:31 PM

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Dannflower Reguba

#60
April 18, 2016, 09:11:17 PM
       I was just trying to get people to admit I was as insane as the rest of them, you can be nuts and level-headed at the same time.... Kinda... But still! Never said I was a dibbun  :P That'd be my brothers.
"Remember, sometimes is best to be like boomerang and come back." ~ Griffen

Experience is simply the name we give our mistakes. ~ Oscar Wilde

Mistakes can make you grow - That doesn't mean you're friends. ~NF - Remember This

Faiyloe

#61
April 18, 2016, 09:47:34 PM
Be careful what you wish for. And teasing is childish.
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Lady Amber

#62
April 18, 2016, 10:09:22 PM
This is great, Gonff! :D I thought this part was especially funny, seeing as Russa and I are the assistants:
QuoteHowever, it did get risky when they almost ran into Groddil and his assistants (Who each had a grasp on one of his arms, twisting him around while he pleaded for help)...

I'm seriously looking forward to the next chapter!

Wylder Treejumper

#63
April 18, 2016, 10:21:48 PM
Very good, Gonff, very good! I really enjoyed the "Cellarbration". Though, think it may be premature to say Søren and V's destiny is marriage... ::)

Just a tip for those spelling and grammar mistakes: Print it and read it aloud to someone. You tend to catch things you miss on a computer when you do.
"'Tis the business of small minds to shrink, but he whose heart is firm, and whose conscience approves his conduct, will pursue his principles unto death."
-Thomas Paine

"Integrity and firmness is all I can promise; these, be the voyage long or short, shall never forsake me although I may be deserted by all men."
-George Washington

Courage: Not only the willingness to die manfully, but also the determination to live decently.

Jukka the Sling

#64
April 18, 2016, 10:53:22 PM
Awesome, Gonff!  I love your poem, and Wylder's, and the fact that I was telling everyone about my idea for a better school (;D), and how everyone cried about Soren and his lady except James, who had to keep up appearances.  Too funny! ;D
"The world is indeed full of peril, and in it there are many dark places; but still there is much that is fair, and though in all lands love is now mingled with grief, it grows perhaps the greater." ~J.R.R. Tolkien

Groddil

#65
April 19, 2016, 04:37:34 AM
Quote from: Lady Amber on April 18, 2016, 10:09:22 PM
This is great, Gonff! :D I thought this part was especially funny, seeing as Russa and I are the assistants:
QuoteHowever, it did get risky when they almost ran into Groddil and his assistants (Who each had a grasp on one of his arms, twisting him around while he pleaded for help)...

I'm seriously looking forward to the next chapter!

^ THIS. Seriously, this is EXACTLY how I envisaged this happening, and a kudos for that. ^

Rainshadow

#66
April 19, 2016, 04:43:27 AM
  I really enjoyed this chapter!  :D  I thought the poems were quite nice, and I love the fact that the only mention of me is just that I'm looking for Leatgo (and then dancing with him).  xD  Though I do have one small complaint as to my characterization:  You said that Leatgo and I put on a spectacular show of dancing, but in reality I can't dance anything other than the most basic of swing dancing.  :P  I DEMAND THAT THIS BE CHANGED IMMEDIATELY BECAUSE I AM ABSOLUTELY OFFENDED THAT YOU CHARACTERIZED ME INCORRECTLY; HOW DARE YOU DO THAT?!

  ;)

  As for the story itself, I'm very invested in it.  I have one theory as to where the plot might go, but I'd rather not say in case I'm horribly wrong.  :P  Keep it up, though!  I wanna see if my theory's correct.  ;)
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rachel25

#67
April 19, 2016, 07:26:13 PM
Loved this chapter. I was smiling for the whole thing, especially the part about me being interested in Soren's love life.  :D and also the dancing, just all in all wonderful. Can't wait for more.
Though as Skarzs mentioned, there are a few grammar and spelling mistakes but I do it as well.  :P But his suggestion about how you write your speech would help a great deal, having the action after the talking and next to it would help, and a little more action along with the talking would just fill in blind spots is all.

Wylder Treejumper

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April 19, 2016, 07:30:23 PM Last Edit: April 19, 2016, 07:51:54 PM by Wylder Treejumper
Quote from: Jukka the Sling on April 18, 2016, 10:53:22 PM
Awesome, Gonff!  I love your poem, and Wylder's, and the fact that I was telling everyone about my idea for a better school (;D), and how everyone cried about Soren and his lady except James, who had to keep up appearances.  Too funny! ;D
Also: I don't cry- and I would probably rather go and wash greasy pots than listen to Soren talk about V ;D
"'Tis the business of small minds to shrink, but he whose heart is firm, and whose conscience approves his conduct, will pursue his principles unto death."
-Thomas Paine

"Integrity and firmness is all I can promise; these, be the voyage long or short, shall never forsake me although I may be deserted by all men."
-George Washington

Courage: Not only the willingness to die manfully, but also the determination to live decently.

Aimless Gallivanter

#69
April 19, 2016, 10:14:05 PM
This is fantastic, and I can't wait to read more :)

You're description of me being disheveled is very accurate haha.
(Did you use redwall-lyrics to find the poem I read? How did the website treat you? was it easy to use? Did you have any problems with it?)
im gay!!!!!!

Skyblade

#70
April 19, 2016, 11:54:58 PM
In real life, taking care of dibbuns would not be my thing ;D Guess I underestimated the harsh work of a badgermum! ;D

Good chapter, Gonff, and I'm excited for the next. Strive to give everyone a chance under the spotlight.

Thanks, MatthiasMan, for the avatar!

Jukka the Sling

#71
April 20, 2016, 02:32:09 AM
Quote from: Wylder Treejumper on April 19, 2016, 07:30:23 PM
Quote from: Jukka the Sling on April 18, 2016, 10:53:22 PM
Awesome, Gonff!  I love your poem, and Wylder's, and the fact that I was telling everyone about my idea for a better school (;D), and how everyone cried about Soren and his lady except James, who had to keep up appearances.  Too funny! ;D
Also: I don't cry- and I would probably rather go and wash greasy pots than listen to Soren talk about V ;D
Actually, I don't think I'd cry about Soren and V in real life either. ;D  It's still really funny, though.

Also, your post is gold. ;D
"The world is indeed full of peril, and in it there are many dark places; but still there is much that is fair, and though in all lands love is now mingled with grief, it grows perhaps the greater." ~J.R.R. Tolkien

Lady Ashenwyte

#72
April 20, 2016, 11:44:10 AM
I really like this one. Of course, was probably crying of laughter when Soren told us tales of him and his lady. I have no emotions.

Quote from: Skarzs on April 18, 2016, 08:30:28 PM
Quote from: Faiyloe on April 18, 2016, 07:52:10 PM
This was awesome, I agree whole heatedly on the comment on Dan being a dibbun XD And I love how you had me and Daskar fighting.  ;D and I like how Leagto intervened. Love the ester eggs too. Seriously though Ash stole our Insane asylum!  ;D :P
We shall get it back, in time. For some reason one more thing I would have liked to see, or rather, liked to have not seen, was your nudge to the events that will come after that chapter.

NEVARRRRRRRRRRRRRR.
The fastest way to a man's heart- Or anyone's, in fact- Is to tear a hole through their chest.

Indeed. You are as ancient as the soot that choked Pompeii into oblivion, though not quite as uncaring. - Rusvul

Just a butterfly struggling through my chrysalis.

rachel25

#73
April 21, 2016, 12:15:22 PM
The only times that I cry is when I'm ill and vulnerable and watching epic films.  :P

LT Sandpaw

#74
April 21, 2016, 02:06:09 PM

Yeah whatever. Ya'll were in tears, I could hear the sobbing from here. ;D


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