Crossed Swords Plotting: Round 2 (For BloodSpine crew and Swords of Freedom)

Started by BrookSkimmer, March 15, 2013, 04:23:42 PM

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Leatho Shellhound

@Romsca, was my last post ok with you? If not, I can change it. BTW the best way to get out of the lock I have is to Headbutt, kick or something.  ;)
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Icefire

I don't really see any PPing...unless you're counting the part where Spera "glances up."
I do see how this could be counted as Mary Sue-ing, but I don't think it's really as bad as you think. Yes, Farril has Joey. However, his attention is split between two Swords and a mousebabe. He may think he's in control of the situation, but I doubt that will last long the way he's going about it.
Living in peace, aye many a season,
Calm in life and sound in reason,,
'Til evil arrives, a wicked horde,
Driving a warrior to pick up his sword,
The challenger rings then, straight and fair,
Justice is with us, beware. Beware!

Kitsune

Yeah, I left a BIG opening!
EDIT: ....until BloodGullet made it a....bird? My character could tell if it was a bird, flapping wings and chirping. I left that opening so we could move the story along! Please edit your post so somebody else can jump in.

BloodGullet

fine I edited it and will stay out of the discussion.  this next round, I'll have just one post and my character will be done.
When ye hear me muzzle lock, say yer prayers, ye bilgerat!