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The Story Of Corporal Rubbadub (Osu's Contest)

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Gonff the Mousethief

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                                              This story is about Corporal Rubbadub as a child and before he became all drummy.
                                              It is an entry for Osu's contest
                                              It has 982 words
                                              Corporal Rubbadub is from the book The Long Partol


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I want the world of Tolkien,
The message of Lewis;
The adventure of Jacques,
And the heart of Milne.
But I want the originality of me.



Gonff the Mousethief

#1
                                                             CHAPTER 1

During the reign of Orlando The Axe, a small haremaid by the name of Sweetpaw married the Drummer of The Long Patrol, Rubder. They led a sweet, happy life. They had 3 leverets, Furfoot, Swifteye, (the General in the book, The Long Patrol) and Rubder the II. Furfoot became the scouter and 12 session Runner for The Long Patrol. Swifteye became a General, but Rubder the II wanted to be like his father. He made his own uniform and drum. He would go and play EVERYWHERE. He would go in the halls, the offices, and even the new Bader, Lady Cregga's room! Some hares called him Rubadub because he played so much.
I want the world of Tolkien,
The message of Lewis;
The adventure of Jacques,
And the heart of Milne.
But I want the originality of me.



Gonff the Mousethief

#2
                                CHAPTER 2

During the Summer of the Ripe Apple, 2 fleets of corsairs attacked Salamandastron. Lady Cregga insisted that Rubder fight in battle. Rubder JR. (being the youngest of the 3) watched as his whole family fought the searats. Then he saw it.

'' FFFFAAAATTTTHHHHHEEEERRRR''!!!!!
Running down the hall and out the frontdoor he ran into the battle. He knelt beside the fallen body of his father. He cried and weeped in sadness and anger. He picked up his father's dirk and sling.

EEEEUUUULLLLAAALLLLLAAAIIIII!!!!!!!!!!


Smashing through the searats he chopped and swang his dirk at everything because of the bloodwrath that he possed.
When the battle was over, Lady Cregga wanted him.
''Dear Rubder, do not be sad over the death of your father, be glad that he is living peacefully in the Dark Forest drumming away with his old master, Orlando. By the way, I have something for you.''
I want the world of Tolkien,
The message of Lewis;
The adventure of Jacques,
And the heart of Milne.
But I want the originality of me.



Gonff the Mousethief

#3
                           CHAPTER 3

Cregga pulled out his father's drum. It was tinted with gold and sliver with two drumsticks made out of the finest wood.
'' WOT THANKS TO YOU JOLLY OL' GIRL TOPHOLE!
''Your welcome Rubder, as a matter of fact, you will be our new dummer!
''THANK YOU MARM! ILL GO OUT AND PLAY RIGHT NOW!
Rubder raced out of the forge room.
''That kid is going to make Salamndastron proud one day :).

When Rubder got outside, there was another person out there as well.

CCCRRROOOOAAAKKK!

I AM RUBFLEE SIR GULPDULP'S MESSENGER. I SAY SURRENDER NOW OR WE WILL HURT Y-
He was cut short as Fuffot shot him with an arrow.
''That should put the blighter to rest.'' Little did he know that shooting that one frog would result in mager disaster.
I want the world of Tolkien,
The message of Lewis;
The adventure of Jacques,
And the heart of Milne.
But I want the originality of me.



Gonff the Mousethief

                           CHAPTER 4
Rubder was walking on the east side of the mountain when he saw a half-score of frogs on each side of him. They were looking for the rabbit who had shot Rubflee. When they saw Rubder, they immediately attacked. With one good blow to the head, they dragged Ruber off to King GulpDulp.

''Excuse me marm, may I ask you were young Rubder has gone? Lightear and Snowferd Found his drum and sticks on the east side marm.'' said Sergant Sappy.
''OK do a full search around the mountain and look in the ship wreckage.''
''yes marm will do''
''also send Furfoot in please,
OK marm.


about 5 leagues away in the Toad Camps, Rubder was waking up.

CCCCRRRROOOOOAAAAKKKKK!

geter up rabittt.t.t.t who are ya? yelled King GulpDulp.
''I-I don't know? Who am I?
GGRRRRROOOOOKKKKK

''You look loik a rubbbaddubba rabbit Flobbyears! HAHAHA
''That's me name, Rubadub BOOM BOOM''
RRROOOOOOAAAAAAAKKK!

Don't be BOOMIN be cottontail or ill slay you in am eart-beat

''Alright Biddybumboomboombidditty Big Lips''

*Rubadub thinks to him self* what am I saying this for?CCCCRRROOOOAAAKKKK!!!

''IN THE PIT WITH HIM!

Rubadub was thrown into the BigPit the pit where the Toads enemys get thrown.
I want the world of Tolkien,
The message of Lewis;
The adventure of Jacques,
And the heart of Milne.
But I want the originality of me.



Redwaller

It's pretty good, but it's a bit fast paced, and punctuation marks are missing.

Gonff the Mousethief

OCC: ya  when I am done I will do back and revise it .im not that good as a writer but I have a lot of ideas
I want the world of Tolkien,
The message of Lewis;
The adventure of Jacques,
And the heart of Milne.
But I want the originality of me.



Gonff the Mousethief

                    Chapter 6

Furfoot walked in to the room
''yes marm?''
''Furfoot, you are Rubder's brother, I want you to take a score of new recruits and head north to the Toad Camps.
''Alrighty marm on me way!

Rubadub was eating the scraps of fish the toads had given him.
*He thinks to himself*
why do I keep making drum noises? do I like drums? I don't know, ill just sleep on it.
He awoke to the sounds of screaming toads and war cries.
''Take that you Big Liped Thingummy!
''Missed you blighter

THUNK

'' I didn't old chap wot wot, ;)

HELP, HELP IM IN THE PIT!
Nothing
Then a rope was lowered down in the pit.
Rubadub climbed it up and saw Furfoot holding it.
''Wot ya say old chap any bruses or marks? Oh well hold on Rubder, were goin' home!
At the sudden mention of his name, Rubder passed out.
I want the world of Tolkien,
The message of Lewis;
The adventure of Jacques,
And the heart of Milne.
But I want the originality of me.



Gonff the Mousethief

                        CHAPTER 7

Upon getting back to Salamandastron, Rubder was beginning to wake up.
''Aye Cregga, we found him in the pit, but when I said his name, he went out, wot'. I don't blinkin' know wot happened?''
''Its alright Furfoot, he'll be OK lets try to wake him up, shall we?
They dabbed a wet dockleaf over his head.

''BBBOOOOOMMMMBBBOOOOOMMMMDDDIIIITTTYYYBBBOOOOOMMMDDDIIIITTTYY!!''
Yelled Rubder as he woke up in shock.

WOT IN FUR AND FREEDOM WAS THAT!
''Whot did I say? oohh that, ever since the toads, I keep BOOM BOOMING randomly like a drum. I called my self Rubadub at the toads because I lost my memory. I like that name Cregga, can I have it?''
''Sure likkle Rubadub you kn- BOOOMMMBOOOMMMMDIITTYYBBAAANNNGGGDDIIITTYYBBBANNNGGG!!!!
''AHHHH not again I cant he-BOOMDITTY if I get stuck BOOMBOOM like this, can BANGBOOOM I be on the Long BOOOOMMDDDIIITTTYY Patrol? BOOOOOMBOOOMMBBAANNNGGG BOOOM
''yes, Corporal Rubadub :)
I want the world of Tolkien,
The message of Lewis;
The adventure of Jacques,
And the heart of Milne.
But I want the originality of me.



Gonff the Mousethief

#9
thank u all for reading, I really appreciate Osu for this contest and the advice she has givin me. Hope u liked it ;D



EEEUUUULLLAAALLLIIIIIAAAAAAA
I want the world of Tolkien,
The message of Lewis;
The adventure of Jacques,
And the heart of Milne.
But I want the originality of me.



Gnoflet

I like it. And your sense of humor is terrific
Shut him up or shut him down.
Normal is just a setting on your dryer.

Gonff the Mousethief

I want the world of Tolkien,
The message of Lewis;
The adventure of Jacques,
And the heart of Milne.
But I want the originality of me.



Captain Tammo

Clever story! Rubbadub was always one of my favorites :)
"Cowards die a thousand times, a warrior only dies once. The spirits of all you have slain are watching you, Vilu Daskar, and they will rest in peace now that your time has come. You must die as you have lived, a coward to the last!" -Luke the warrior