Ublaz Most Precious

[urthstripe]

Ublaz sat impatiently on his throne. He was awaiting a very special delivery from Bolla, his new trader. Bolla had come from an island far in the south east. On an island known as Gillanee, were the most precious of all tropical lumber resode, the Sage Tidal Palm. Its wood was strong enough to withstand coastal storms, so , it was perfect for ships. Its wood also had a beautiful spiral, so , it was perfect for thrones. Ublaz was almost past the breaking point when two monitor lizard soldiers came in with a sly looking ferret between them. Bolla. As they escorted the ferret up to ublaz, the pine martin could barley contain his excitement. when bolla was finally at ublaz's feet, he spoke , saying "O mighty ruler of all sea's, I have what you have requested. Ublaz replied with "Every log you have brought me is another ship".

[Skyblade]

Very good

[urthstripe]

Thanks a lot. Not many people are willing to read a newbies fan fic!

[Wot, wot!]

This is good hope you write more!

[Captain Tammo]

Not many people are willing to read a newbies fan fic!

Don't get yourself down over that lie!

I'm in the middle of posting my third fanfiction to this forum. I've checked all three's viewcounts and comments over time and have learned a few things... One trend that almost always repeats itself, and that's that when you post a fanfiction, no matter who you are, the views usually start coming in very slowly at first. Don't get discouraged, though! Even though it may take you more than two months to get to 200 views and maybe 2 replies, keep on chugging and write to the best of your ability! You'll soon find that the views start rolling in after a while and people will begin leaving comments here and there on it, even months after the fanfiction is finished!

So don't say that, we were all fanfiction noobs once Welcome to the forum!

[urthstripe]

Thanks, I will!

[urthstripe]

Ublaz and Bolla had rambled over to the lumber yard, where 12 Sage Tidal Palm tree- trunks were tied together with a rope made from vines and sinew. Ublaz ran his hand up the tree- trunks. Ublaz turned to Bolla, only to find the shifty ferret gone. While Ublaz was pondering where the trader had gone, Bolla was sneaking up behind him a scaling knife. Ublaz, being the cunning one he was, whipped around just in time to smack Bolla with his paw and knock the knife away. Without saying a word, Ublaz spun on his heels away from Bolla,who was still in shock from what ublaz had done.

Ublaz came back to Bolla after noon time had passed. Ublaz asked Bolla to walk with him to the lumber yard. After what had happened earlier, Bolla knew not to say no.

[urthstripe]

Hello! I would just like to say thank you to everyone who has been reading this fan-fiction. This is the last installment of it.

Ublaz and Bolla stood by the west wall of the lumber yard. Ublaz put his arm around Bolla like he was a good friend. Ublaz spoke softly and kindly saying " do not worry, I forgive you for what happened and will still be paying you in full".Bolla was slowly relaxing and un- tenceing . What Boll did not see was ublaz winking at a groupe of monitors on the wall-top,who were holding a thick oak log over Bolla head. At Ublaz's signal they droped the log. Before Bolla could let out a scream, he was crushed by the piece of lumber. Now Ublaz could go back to his plans of carving the Sage Tidal Palm tree logs into a throne. 

[The Mask]

Great Work Urthstripe! Short Sharp and Shiny!

[Lady Ashenwyte]

Nice. I would suggest taking up a writing course to further sharpen your already quite good writing skills. But one question though, why did Bolla attack Ublaz and why did Ublaz kill Bolla, knowing that he might be the only way to procure Sage Tidal Palm logs?

[urthstripe]

Thanks! I DEFINETLY will. And bolla attacked ublaz to claim his throne as emperor then ublaz attack bolla to make sure nothing else happend