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lass of something much

𝓛𝓪𝓼𝓼𝓲𝓮 𝓕𝓲𝓼𝓱

Kade Rivok

Excuse me, it was a swimming hole.  Wrong term.  EVEN SO.
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lass of something much

𝓛𝓪𝓼𝓼𝓲𝓮 𝓕𝓲𝓼𝓱

Ebantu the Kararehe

Infant Ebby is a smol, out-of-control firebending terror. It's a good thing she's also quite cute.

May the road rise up to meet you.
May the wind be always at your back.
May the sun shine warm upon your face,
And rains fall soft upon your fields.
And until we meet again,
May God hold you in the palm of His hand.


lass of something much

𝓛𝓪𝓼𝓼𝓲𝓮 𝓕𝓲𝓼𝓱

Kade Rivok

Words!
Writings of a Mad Man

Songs!
Kade's Vocal Emporium

Gaming!
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lass of something much

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A fic where Redwall and Salamandastron are in danger - two sieges for the price of one.



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Welcome to #the-dark-empire!
This is the start of the #the-dark-empire channel. A fic where Redwall and Salamandastron are in danger - two sieges for the price of one.

Waycaster03/10/2020
@AvengeThem have fun!
March 11, 2020

AvengeThem03/11/2020
Thanks
March 16, 2020

Keva StrongbowLast Monday at 8:53 AM
Hi, new member!
March 17, 2020

LassLast Tuesday at 4:42 PM
Ooo, who are you avenging?
March 18, 2020

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 12:57 AM
heh
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All the poor innocent vermin killed by murderous woodlanders
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I mean, boiling half of Cluny's army alive was...
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And they threw boulders on the other side of the tunnel so they couldn't escape...

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:02 AM
I know.
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I bet a fanfic about the gang pressed soldiers would be interesting.

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:03 AM
Probably

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:05 AM
Most definetly

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:07 AM
It's hard to make a "black and white" story, when some of the antagonists are forced against their will.

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:07 AM
very true

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:07 AM
But it is interesting. I wish it were more heavily utilized.

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:08 AM
Well I have something of that sort coming eventuaaaaally
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I suppose Deserters counts as well but Keldors slower than I am
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Havent read most of Dark Empire so wouldnt know

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:08 AM
So, all the vermin die in redwall? Does it mention any of the gang pressed going free?
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Alright.
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That's cool though Grey!

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:09 AM
A lot die in Redwall

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:09 AM
Captain Snow and Squire Gingivere kill all the poor vermin trying to escape the murderous woodlanders

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:09 AM
A couple ran out the abbey and were assaulted (read devoured) by a cat and an owl
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Im not sure if the wording was vague enough for there to plausibly be one or two survivors

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:10 AM
I'm guessing there was a few survivors

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:11 AM
Poor things.

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:11 AM
R.I.P.
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Though better than getting boiled alive

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:11 AM
Why did Brian make them gang pressed if they were all evil in the first place?
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True.

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:11 AM
Interesting question...

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:12 AM
Well the actual pressganging makes Cluny seem more evil
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So theres that

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:12 AM
Killconey didn't wish to join the army. He wanted to have peace. But his family was murdered and then he was killed by vicious Matthias

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:13 AM
Wow......
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That would be an awesome fic!

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:13 AM
Yes.
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Or just a drabbel
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drabble

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:14 AM
Drabble wouldn't be bad

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:14 AM
I have many planned for some vermin
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Specifically Groddil, Killconey, and a few others

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:14 AM
To be fair it was more Cluny who killed Killconey

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:14 AM
King Mortspear
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True

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:15 AM
Grabbed him and used him as a shield

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:15 AM
It could read like a straight forward drama tragedy, but would be darkly comedic cause the reader knows the context.
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You're right Grey.
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That's cool though! I'd love to read then avenge!

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:16 AM
Not as dark as being BOILED ALIVE
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And Constance smashes Fangburn against the wall countless times

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:17 AM
Ew I know.

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:17 AM
The Groddil drabble will be somewhat important to the Dark Empire

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:22 AM
i forget, who was Groddil

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:23 AM
High Magician to Ungatt Trunn.
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He killed his master

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:23 AM
Pushed him into the sea?

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:23 AM
yes

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:24 AM
Nice
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I like him

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:24 AM
So do I
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Though Trunn was one of the greatest villains, I liked Groddil more

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:25 AM
I always wished we had seen more of Verdauga

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:25 AM
So do I
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I have a plan for Mortspear, maybe I will do Verdauga

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:28 AM
Comparing Ungatt and Groddil is unfair for me though
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Im biased towards rats

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 1:28 AM
Neither are rats...

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Wednesday at 1:29 AM
Groddil isnt a rat?
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Oh fox same difference
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I think cats are my least favourite Redwall species by process of elimination
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Which, I guess, is a bit unfair on them(edited)

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:42 AM
Oh yes, I heard of the poor fox. He was sympathetic and won at the end.

WaycasterLast Wednesday at 1:42 AM
Sayna wrote about him.

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:42 AM
Oh that's cool!
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Her fanfic account is sayna as well yes?

WaycasterLast Wednesday at 1:43 AM
She doesn't really use FFN
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Go to Holt Rhulain for her.

abrahemLast Wednesday at 1:45 AM
Oh nice.
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I will.
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Sounds like a neat site.

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 11:18 AM
I will check it out

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 11:30 AM
So far it's more of after Trunn. He must be ancient! How he could make it all the way to Mossflower

WaycasterLast Wednesday at 11:30 AM
I don't understand. Care to paraphrase?

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 11:31 AM
Sayna's fan-fiction about Groddil

WaycasterLast Wednesday at 11:31 AM
Ah. Which one? There are so many...

abrahemLast Wednesday at 11:31 AM
Cool.

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 11:31 AM
Four Warriors cometh has him
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On Holt Rhulain, not FFN

WaycasterLast Wednesday at 11:32 AM
Ah. Yeah...
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She altered the timeline. Not a bad thing.

AvengeThemLast Wednesday at 11:32 AM
No
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Not a bad thing
March 19, 2020

AvengeThemLast Thursday at 1:41 AM
Of course, Groddil can use magic in her story

WaycasterLast Thursday at 1:41 AM
Lots of beasts can in hers. Or mine for that matter.

AvengeThemLast Thursday at 1:44 AM
Yeah, I noticed

WaycasterLast Thursday at 1:45 AM
Different systems and all that.

AvengeThemLast Thursday at 1:45 AM
Nobody can use magic at the present time in mine

WaycasterLast Thursday at 1:45 AM
Time travel!

AvengeThemLast Thursday at 1:46 AM
Heh
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Of course, I'd need magic to do that
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Kind of a paradox

WaycasterLast Thursday at 1:47 AM
I won't touch that in the near future. Things get out of paw quickly.

AvengeThemLast Thursday at 1:48 AM
Yes. Time travel can be very confusing

ArkosLast Thursday at 1:50 AM
If you think about it there is only one way it would work. I love talking about it because it is so simple

WaycasterLast Thursday at 1:50 AM
Oh?

AvengeThemLast Thursday at 1:50 AM
Hmm?

WaycasterLast Thursday at 1:52 AM



Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Thursday at 1:54 AM
There is one way it can work but its not exactly time travel

WaycasterLast Thursday at 1:54 AM
¿Qué?

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Thursday at 1:54 AM
And its more of a prank really
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Do what the Mayans did and end your calendar on a specific date
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Someone, somewhere will wind up thinking it's a doomsday date
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Boom, you've pranked the people of the future

abrahemLast Thursday at 1:59 AM
lol. True
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People were so dumb during 2012.

Your Theory Is IncorrectLast Thursday at 2:00 AM
They
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Are
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Still
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Dumb

abrahemLast Thursday at 2:01 AM
TASD.
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That needs to become an acronym.
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Because it's so true

AvengeThemLast Thursday at 4:59 AM
TASD. Nice

abrahemLast Thursday at 5:38 AM
Lol. Yep.

AvengeThemLast Thursday at 5:55 AM
They are still dumb

abrahemLast Thursday at 6:03 AM
Indeed

AvengeThemLast Thursday at 6:07 AM
True

AvengeThemLast Thursday at 8:20 AM
Chapter Thirteen is now out!
March 21, 2020

AvengeThemToday at 10:16 AM
Chapter Fourteen should be out!

not LassToday at 10:16 AM
Yay!

AvengeThemToday at 10:16 AM
I think

not LassToday at 10:17 AM
you work really fast!

AvengeThemToday at 10:17 AM
Yeah it's out. Thank you!
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I hope my quality's good though

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:27 AM
For a first fic its not bad

AvengeThemToday at 10:27 AM
Thank you
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What should I fix?

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:28 AM
Hmmm
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Thats hard to sat
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Say*
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Theres nothibg specifically that you do wrong

AvengeThemToday at 10:28 AM
Ah.

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:28 AM
But some of your scenes flow a bit too quickly
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And the plot/characters aren't all that special

AvengeThemToday at 10:29 AM
Ah. I'll work on that

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:29 AM
I think mostly what you should do is to continue doing what you are doing

AvengeThemToday at 10:29 AM
Okay
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But I will work on characters

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:30 AM
Hmmm
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Has Way asked you the question yet?
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The aspects of a story thing

AvengeThemToday at 10:30 AM
?

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:30 AM
Ill take that as a no
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So
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AT, in your story what do you put the most emphasis on?
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Plot, character or lore?

AvengeThemToday at 10:31 AM
Ah. I should probably find out the answer.
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Probably plot
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Then lore

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:32 AM
Id say the same
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Very few fics focus on lore mind
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And your characters arent bad
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Its just, for me at least, they need to compete against the multitudes of other characters I read/write about or else they shall be forgotten

AvengeThemToday at 10:34 AM
Ah.

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:34 AM
Its sort of like how most of the hares in the redwall books are interchangeable

AvengeThemToday at 10:35 AM
Stiffener and Nubbs Miggory are exactly the same

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:35 AM
Only a few of them really stand out
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Now
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Having two of the exact same type of character isnt a bad thing

AvengeThemToday at 10:36 AM
At least, not in the same book. Unless they're twins or something like that

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:36 AM
In fact it can help develop them if you use their similarities to highlight their differences

AvengeThemToday at 10:36 AM
True

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:37 AM
Take all Ì say with a grain of salt though
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Im no better than you when it comes to writing and I havent read-read half your story.

AvengeThemToday at 10:38 AM
Ah.

Your Theory Is IncorrectToday at 10:38 AM
Its merely where my opinions lie.

AvengeThemToday at 10:38 AM
Ah.

abrahemToday at 10:44 AM
Those are good tips Grey.

AvengeThemToday at 10:44 AM
Yes. Thank you

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AvengeThemToday at 12:07 PM
Chapter XV is now out! Second to last Redwall chapter for Book I, and Third to last chapter for Book I. Please Review, I probably made some mistakes!






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𝓛𝓪𝓼𝓼𝓲𝓮 𝓕𝓲𝓼𝓱

Ebantu the Kararehe

Lass, put that in a spoiler please.

Edit: Thank you.
Infant Ebby is a smol, out-of-control firebending terror. It's a good thing she's also quite cute.

May the road rise up to meet you.
May the wind be always at your back.
May the sun shine warm upon your face,
And rains fall soft upon your fields.
And until we meet again,
May God hold you in the palm of His hand.


Verdauga

Killing the mood since 2019

Thanks for the artwork Lass, Scott, and Wortshire! (And Dannflower as well for the Worldstate badge.)

lass of something much

𝓛𝓪𝓼𝓼𝓲𝓮 𝓕𝓲𝓼𝓱

Verdauga

Killing the mood since 2019

Thanks for the artwork Lass, Scott, and Wortshire! (And Dannflower as well for the Worldstate badge.)

Ebantu the Kararehe

Infant Ebby is a smol, out-of-control firebending terror. It's a good thing she's also quite cute.

May the road rise up to meet you.
May the wind be always at your back.
May the sun shine warm upon your face,
And rains fall soft upon your fields.
And until we meet again,
May God hold you in the palm of His hand.


lass of something much

𝓛𝓪𝓼𝓼𝓲𝓮 𝓕𝓲𝓼𝓱

Verdauga

Killing the mood since 2019

Thanks for the artwork Lass, Scott, and Wortshire! (And Dannflower as well for the Worldstate badge.)

Ebantu the Kararehe

Infant Ebby is a smol, out-of-control firebending terror. It's a good thing she's also quite cute.

May the road rise up to meet you.
May the wind be always at your back.
May the sun shine warm upon your face,
And rains fall soft upon your fields.
And until we meet again,
May God hold you in the palm of His hand.