corin the black fox

[Captain Rake Nightfur]

Corin the black  fox
        By Captain Rake Nightfur,
                           
                             Prologue:    
Wellcane sat on a log outside a tent made from animal skins, a old vixen came from the tent, wellcane grabbed her
"well?" he sat "is it over?"    
the vixen qaiuled under his strong  grip "aye lord  ye' may come in."
The powerful fox throw her like a rag doll and walked into the tent.
                                             
Inside the tent a pure white vixen save for the tip of her tail lay on a bed of Velvet;
She look up at wellcane's inters, wellcane glared at her.
"well? Where is he?"
"he is here, lord." said the vixen and she took a bundle for her side;
"his small!" said the black fox
"he will grow, lord."
                                             

The old vixen come in, wellcane turned "well, what are the omens, seeyer?"

The runso the  seer take her omen's and cast them her eyes turned dull and she said in a crones

The stone most save the chosen  one
The stone most be it's saver.
The world will break the sun will burn 'til the one is revealed
The earth world will be the taker,
The one who's has the dagger and green will kill the father that made him be.
They'll  be one who will deny the stones life and then...kill for all ye life!!!

                                           *
"well, What does that mean?" asked wellcane glaring at the seer.
The seer bowed "lord, me thinks it is a prophecy about they son." said the seer
rubbish!"
"nay, lord, it is."
"then what does it mean?"
"they son will become a dangerous beast."
Wellcane glared at the seerey "is he a threat?"
Runso picked her words carefully "lord...they son MAY be come a threat."
Wellcane looked thoughtfull "if he is a threat he most go."
The white vixen, who had stayed silent all this time got up "but lord he is only a babe!"
Wellcane turned around silents! He will be ."
"No!" the vixen grad the babe and ran
Wellcane bellowed grad her!! Stop her! Kill her anything just get her!!"
The vixen ran to the river and throw her babe in "be safe." she said and watched the bundle float down the river wellcane came up fool, his gone now."
Of the two foxes silneow was to be right



(do you think i should write more?)


Important note: the image you see is NOT done my me, all cedits go to the rightful artist. ^^

[Captain Rake Nightfur]

please!! tell me what you think!!!! )

[Tiria Wildlough]

Write more! I'm kinda curious to know what happens. Also, you should use a spell checker.

[Skipper]

Aye, but the story seems intresting, the babe and the warlord remind me abit off veil from outcast of redwall

[Captain Rake Nightfur]

                                        
Corin the black fox stared at Redwall through piercing emerald-green eyes. The fox had been watching the Abbey for four days so far. Soon, he would make his move...
                                              *
The setting sun shone on Redwall Abbey, turning the red sandstone walls scarlet. Breeze the squirrelmaid was sitting at the pond, singing a quiet melody. The tune and her sweet voice drifted up to the Abbey walls.


"The lark sings her song
But no one calls back
She sings her song though you never look back
Then the lark flies on high to the world of sky
Where she lives there happily,
ever whistling her sweet melody..."



The quick ditty sighed on the breeze, carrying the sounds to the lawn, where Rinson, Breeze's father, and the Skipper of otters sat chatting amiably.  
"I reckin that yore daughter sings to the birds, mate," said Skipper.
"Aye!" Rinson said proudly. "Joy o' my heart an' the apple of me eye, that little maid is."
"She could charm the birds out o' the trees with that voice."
Rinson laughed, swelling his chest with pride. "I bet she does!"
Breeze saw her father and waved a paw. "Hi, you two! How are you?"
Rinson smiled. "Thank ye, Breeze, we're doin' just fine! How are ye, me little bird-charmer?"
Breeze sidled over, grinning slyly. "Y'know, I heard that the Summer Feast will be here soon..."
Skipper chuckled. "A fine singin' voice an' a good pair o' ears, that's wot yore daughter's got! Rinson, matey, the cook'd best watch out before she comes in there an' charms 'im into an early feast! I wouldn't mind, actually, 'twill be a feast to remember!"
Breeze smiled sweetly. "Certainly, Skip, I think you'll enjoy dressing up as a clown with the rest of your ottercrew!"
Skipper smote his brow in mock anguish. "Ye'd be able to sing me into it, I wager!"
Breeze giggled and skipped off, mischief glittering in her eyes.
Skipper shifted into a more comfortable position. "Well, Rinson, ye've got yore work cut out for ye with that one, that's for sure!"
Rinson sighed. "Perhaps so, Skip, but she's a good daughter. She's young, she'll grow out of it."

                                          *
Breeze walked up to a mouse about her age. "Good Evening, Farris, how are you?"
The mouse was lean and tall, but of strong build. He had dark grey eyes, and was a quiet type. He dipped his head in acknowledgement. "Fine, thank you, Breeze." Though the reply was polite, it was distant and cool. Farris was not born at the Abbey; he had come 12 seasons ago, nought but a young orphan. He never spoke of his family, and was very secretive.

                                                *
Corin the fox was watching the Abbey, waiting in the growing darkness.


thanks moss-sama for editing :3 )

Important note: the image you see is NOT done my me, all cedits go to the rightful artist. ^^

[Captain Rake Nightfur]

(ow and sorry it took so long...school *sigh* )

[Captain Rake Nightfur]

thanks! and now that i think about it, you right....but the storys nothing like outcast of redwall )

Aye, but the story seems intresting, the babe and the warlord remind me abit off veil from outcast of redwall

[Captain Rake Nightfur]

well...what do you guy think?

[MatthiasMan]

Really Good!!

[Captain Rake Nightfur]

Really Good!!

thanks!  i tried my best 

[Captain Rake Nightfur]

three more post, before i post more    maybe i asked to much of people but ow well

[MatthiasMan]

If you don't have time to do it, during recess go to the library and write a rough draft. Then you'll know what to write at home so it'll go by quicker. This is what I do for Danderson's story. (my story)

I can't wait until the next part comes out!

[Captain Rake Nightfur]

thanks old chap, wot. i do my writing at home it only takes about 1 hour to do a cap. i have the plot and stuff in my head and a now the full story so i'm just waiting for 2 more post!  

P.S. Thanks for your help though.
P.P.S.i think i wait too long to do the first cap,skipper and
Tiria are not replying  

If you don't have time to do it, during recess go to the library and write a rough draft. Then you'll know what to write at home so it'll go by quicker. This is what I do for Danderson's story. (my story)

I can't wait until the next part comes out!

[Captain Rake Nightfur]

TWO MORE POST..

[MatthiasMan]

Do you have to get an amount of posts from people to add more to your story or something?