The Forbidden Tales (Chapter 7 Full chapter - Yogroth's Identity - 9/25/11)

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James Gryphon

#15
July 16, 2011, 07:43:31 AM
Quote from: Captain Tammo on July 16, 2011, 07:22:04 AM
And the oil thing sounds a bit much
Well, if it sounds a little cruel, remember that the Redwallers did a very similar thing in Redwall, when they killed poor Darkclaw and the troops with him with boiling water.

The engineering isn't out of there either; levers and such did exist in the Middle Ages, and earlier, which is about the time this took place.
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Captain Tammo

#16
July 21, 2011, 02:08:59 AM
You raise a good point Mr. gryphon
2 questions for the author?
1. Is the oil contraption built into the stone? Or is it separate?
2. When's the next chapter coming out? I'd love to see it!
"Cowards die a thousand times, a warrior only dies once. The spirits of all you have slain are watching you, Vilu Daskar, and they will rest in peace now that your time has come. You must die as you have lived, a coward to the last!" -Luke the warrior

Captain Tammo

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July 21, 2011, 02:09:35 AM
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"Cowards die a thousand times, a warrior only dies once. The spirits of all you have slain are watching you, Vilu Daskar, and they will rest in peace now that your time has come. You must die as you have lived, a coward to the last!" -Luke the warrior

AakashB

#18
July 21, 2011, 06:53:34 AM
Put up the preview. It will be of the start of the Long Patrol's march and you'll get to see Yogroth again  :o

Captain Tammo

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July 25, 2011, 06:28:26 AM
It's coming out great!
"Cowards die a thousand times, a warrior only dies once. The spirits of all you have slain are watching you, Vilu Daskar, and they will rest in peace now that your time has come. You must die as you have lived, a coward to the last!" -Luke the warrior

Tiria Wildlough

#20
July 25, 2011, 08:25:04 AM
Lookin' good! ;D ;D ;D
But I forget, what is the Long Patrol going to fight against?
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AakashB

#21
July 25, 2011, 03:33:57 PM
Thank you for the compliments!

@Captain Tammo, the oil contraption is built over the walls.

@Tiria, the Long Patrol is going to Redwall, where the scouts said they sighted thousands of vermin.

AakashB

#22
August 03, 2011, 04:24:06 AM
Now you get to see the machine in action!

Captain Tammo

#23
August 03, 2011, 05:04:33 AM
I like the twist you put on history at the end
"Cowards die a thousand times, a warrior only dies once. The spirits of all you have slain are watching you, Vilu Daskar, and they will rest in peace now that your time has come. You must die as you have lived, a coward to the last!" -Luke the warrior

Tiria Wildlough

#24
August 04, 2011, 07:30:53 AM
One question. If Vauz really had his arm crushed by Yogroth, wouldn't he be feeling a lot more pain?  ???
Just wondered!   ;)
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James Gryphon

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August 16, 2011, 12:37:51 PM Last Edit: August 16, 2011, 12:43:10 PM by James Gryphon
I have to say chapter 4 is where the tone of the story really changed, for me...

The introduction, with the Abbot mole, was interesting and I expected business as usual with the stoats.

When they first started speaking, though, is where things started to get just a bit off... and when Sheryl started to put her dastardly plan into action, I started to feel maybe just a little bit uneasy.

What they ended up doing was definitely a surprise, and struck me as being incredibly cold... and Moxor, instead of just being useless, I consider to be like a villain now, albeit one still in training.

I have to say that this story has put me on the side of the "vermin", and caused me to hope that Durja is able to get revenge on the Abbey -- as unusual and awful as that might sound.
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AakashB

#26
August 18, 2011, 04:50:16 PM
Yea, I'm really intrigued by Sheryl's character. She is the one who's read the attempted invasions of Redwall so many times, that she doesn't even think twice about destroying the vermin immediately. In this case, they were truly being honest, but I guess that trait doesn't fit well with her image of them. That, and seeing how pessimistic she is, I wonder how she would treat an invasion if it happened.

And Moxor is being blinded by the valor of being a hero. It really has to do more with being strong minded rather than being strong pawed. It will be interesting to see where he goes to.

AakashB

#27
September 09, 2011, 04:18:02 AM
Anyone excited for the next chapter?
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