The Invaders

[Shadowed One]

It's good! I like the storyline! Good job overall!

Thanks a lot!

[Shadowed One]

                                                     Chapter 5

The Long Patrol had reached a decision.
"We will not tolerate these wolf chaps little invasion attempt," said Major Meet Swiggleton," if they attack, we'll be ready."
So when the sun set, the mountain of Salamandastron was prepared for war.
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The wolf ships sailed in towards Salamandastron, waiting for dawn to come. The invaders had arrived!
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As dawn broke, the wolf landing boats headed to shore. As soon as they landed, the northern army of wolves charged at Salamandastron. The hares began firing at them as soon as they were in range, and wolf crossbows fired bolts at the hare defenders. The battle for Salamandastron had begun!

[Shadowed One]

                                                    Chapter 6

"Keep going! Don't stop now! Run for the mountain! Take the mountain!" yelled Angtar Boneshatter. The wolves were charging Salamandastron. While hare archers were thinning the ranks of the wolf army, the wolves were managing to reach the mountain. They were using axes and a battering ram to break down the gates of the mountain.
"Stand firm! Don't let any bloomin' wolves into the bally mountain, you chaps!" said a hare captain standing with some hares at the gates. Suddenly, the wolves broke the gates down! They rushed inside, only to be confronted by hares with long pikes.
"Attack!" yelled Angtar as he smashed a hare with his axe. The hares were fighting bravely, but the size of the wolves gave them an advantage. advantage. Soon the Long Patrollers at the gates were dead or captured.
"Take the mountain! Kill them all!" howled Angtar.

[rachel25]

GOOD Chapter 

[Shadowed One]

Thanks!

[Redwaller]

Awesome!

[rachel25]

The chapters need to be a little longer I think apart from that it's good   

[Shadowed One]

                                                     Chapter 7

While a deadly battle was being waged at Salamandastron, Redwall Abbey was at peace. It had been at peace now for five hundred seasons, and none could remember the trouble they had had with Razzid Wearat. The Abbot was walking in the Orchard when the skipper of otters, Sedduk Wavedog, ran up.
"Father, there's a hare at the gates, says he wants to see you," said Sedduk.
"Oh, I will go right now. We haven't had visitors for quite awhile!" said the Abbot.
When they arrived at the gate, Mipnot the mouse gatekeeper had let the hare in. He wore the red tunic of a Long Patroller.
"Father Abbot, I must speak with you. I have urgent news. Salamandastron is being attacked. We need help!"

[Redwaller]

That's great!

[Free Thought]

Good job!

I think you are due for an update though!  (just joking!)

[Shadowed One]

I was on vacation, so I couldn't update it.

[Shadowed One]

                                                   Chapter 8

Far to the north, and many days later, a small band of able bodied Redwallers and a hare trekked towards the coast. Suddenly, several otters armed with swords, axes, and longbows surrounded them.
"Who are you, and what are you doing in the domain of Randun Axehound, Chieftain of the Rogue Crew?" said their leader.
"We come from Redwall Abbey, and wish to speak with his lordship," answered the hare.
After quickly consulting the other otters, the leader beckoned them to follow him.
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At Salamandastron, the Long Patrol had fought valiantly, but in the end the wolves had defeated them. Fortunately, about 500 hares managed to escape and began journeying up the coast to find help.

[Shadowed One]

                                               

Chapter 9

As the Redwallers and the hare walked through the Rogue Crew village, they received many odd glances and stares from the battle-hardened otters. They were led into a large hall to meet the chieftain. They walked towards a large, oaken throne upon which sat an otter. He was a fiercesome sight, with a long cloak, a helmet of steel, and a huge double-sided battle axe.
"Who comes before Randun Axehound, son of Rør, son of Ruggan, son of Skor, High Chieftain of the Rogue Crew?" bellowed the otter next to the Redwallers. The otters all knelt, as did the Redwallers.
"Ah, these are Redwallers! I have met them before. Friends, why do you come here? What is your request?" said Randun, the otter on the throne. The hare stepped forward.
"These Redwallers have volunteered to help Salamandastron, which is under attack. We came to ask your assistance, great Randun," explained the hare. Before Randun could answer, an otter guard burst into the hall.
"Sir, a large group of creatures is headed this way! What should we do?" he asked.

[cluneythescourge]

awesome!!!! keep writing!
i have an idea, you don't have to use it, but it would be funny to have one hare be really smart aleky to the vermin.... to add a dash of humor

[Shadowed One]

I might do that, but don't be angry if I don't.