The Vermin Warrior

[Eulaliaaa!]

*facepalm* I didn't give that much thought. He posted the two shrews to be on guard so no one attacked in the night and Stashi wouldn't run off. They were supposed to be watching, but fell asleep. It doesn't make a lot of sense, thank you for pointing that out.

[Lady Ashenwyte]

Your welcome. And for editing, I find leaving the freshly written chapter as it is and come back to it a few hours later or the next day. You can  spot mistakes now. The better thing to do is get a person to look at it and point out all the flaws. These methods help a lot with editing.

[Feles]

There are two small things of bother that i found in chapter four,

There is no indication that skipper lowered his voice when he started talking to the abbot, which means that he either yelled in the abbots face or was for some random reason, still talking to his maties, nitpicking, i know, it just bothered me a bit

[Eulaliaaa!]

No problem, thanks for pointing that out. I've been a little busy lately, I'll see if I can write another chapter soon.

[Jetthebinturong]

According to my English teacher, some of the advice you have received is incorrect. Now it could be different in America so this is not necessarily true but a comma is not always the right punctuation to use at the end of speech. If it is a question then a question mark should be used, if it is an exclamation then you use an exclamation mark. However you do treat them as commas so you don't end the sentence with it or capitalise the next word after the speech.

Completely random example:
"Where are we going," he asked. - This would be incorrect; the correct punctuation would be:
"Where are we going?" he asked.
So the question mark would normally end a sentence but because it's dialogue you treat it as a comma.

Just something I noticed.

[The Skarzs]

Pretty sure grammar and punctuation is the same here as in the UK, Jet. Standard writing procedures for a standard language, yes?

[Eulaliaaa!]

Oh no. Looks over what I've written and cringes, this story is terrible (good idea, has potential, but poorly written). I may try to re-write this one day, or just start another story and forget this.

[Jetthebinturong]

Pretty sure grammar and punctuation is the same here as in the UK, Jet. Standard writing procedures for a standard language, yes?

I would presume so but I'm not going to say that that's definitely the case.

[The Skarzs]

Yup.

Oh no. Looks over what I've written and cringes, this story is terrible (good idea, has potential, but poorly written). I may try to re-write this one day, or just start another story and forget this.

Don't get discouraged.

[Eulaliaaa!]

Yup.

Oh no. Looks over what I've written and cringes, this story is terrible (good idea, has potential, but poorly written). I may try to re-write this one day, or just start another story and forget this.

Don't get discouraged.

Actually, this encourages me to continue writing and improving. Looking back, I can already see the improvements I've made, and I want to keep getting better. 

[Skyblade]

I think this is good. Though you've DEFINITELY improved a lot. You're amazing now

[Eulaliaaa!]

Thank you